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The weak are so easily controlled. Anton Chekhov’s essay, “A Nincompoop,” reveals how some people can be so spineless that they would let a person walk all over them and get what they want with just a few false stories and authority. In this particular essay, Anton Chekhov talks to his children’s babysitter and they talk over what he owes her for the past two months that she worked there. Whatever Anton Chekhov said, regardless of if it was true or not, she wouldn’t argue or refuse the things he said happened. For example, Anton said on some random date that he had already given her 10 rubles, which he didn’t, so he was going to minus that from her salary and she just stood there and let him get away with that because she was scared because of her weakness. In my life I have experienced this too as well. One of my very good friends is a weak person and whenever all my friends and I go out to eat somewhere and share the bill for the meal, my other friends will just tell the weak friend that he owes more than he actually does. When the weak friend goes to reach for the bill to see if it’s true, my other friends keep it away from him and yell at him for not believing them so he starts feeling guilty and just pays whatever they say. The weak people of the world just get walked all over and Anton Chekhov’s plan was to teach his babysitter a lesson so that something like what he tried to pull on her would never seriously happen to her again. Hopefully all weak people will have an Anton Chekhov in their life to teach them to be strong.

Chekhov, Anton. “A Nincompoop.” Models for Writers: Short Essays for Composition. A. Rosa and P. Eschholz. Boston: Bedford/St. Martin, 2010. 444-6.

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    Every persons face has features of detail. This person's face in particular shows no emotion, not even when he’s most scared and not even when he’s most happy. His face shows the fearlessness that a warrior obtains after long years of victories in battles of wars. He’s also got these hairless eyebrows that are wrinkled, wrinkled like the really small marks a t-shirt gets that are hard to get out and will only come out with ironing. These eyebrows leave his eyes firmly set in their sockets with a slight shade around them from light blocked by the overhanging eyebrows which give him this distinct look. On the side of each face appears wrinkles by the corner of each eye showing the age that is catching up to him. He doesn’t smile much; he is too calm and emotionless for that. His hairline’s receding pushing his curly gray hair back away showing his forehead. His forehead is pale and white as snow and smooth and soft as a new born baby’s which is created by the inevitable age that we all must face. Although his forehead is white, his cheeks are red and rosy. They look as if they’re beginning to droop with no signs of dimples. His jaw is average size, but appears to be clenched hard permanently. His chin is rounded perfectly to fit his face and almost appears to be holding up his cheeks from slowly drooping down his face to the floor. The edges of his mouth are straight as a line that which is parallel to the ground.  His lips show small signs of wrinkles from the many years of eating and talking. His nose has a big structure looking to it that connects right into the overhanging eyebrows which overshadow his dark blue eyes. The nose is long coming down his face with quite a pointy tip and underneath it are two big nostrils like little caves. His ears are covered by the gray rough hair that almost looks like a cloud from a good distance.

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Famous Face

             Every persons face has features of detail. This person's face in particular shows no emotion. Not even in when he’s most scared. Not even when he’s most happy. His face shows the fearlessness a warrior obtains after long years of winning battles and wars. He’s got these hairless eye brows that are wrinkled like the really small wrinkles a t-shirt gets that are hard to get out and will only come out with ironing. His eyebrows leave his eyes to be set in their sockets with a little shade around them from overhanging eye brows which give him a distinct look. On the side of each face shows wrinkles at the corner of each eye showing the age catching up to him. He doesn’t smile much; he is too calm and emotionless for that, besides he’s always being looked at as a role model, he has to be a rock. His hairline’s receding pushing his curly gray hair back away showing his forehead which. His forehead is pale and white as snow and smooth as a baby’s created by the inevitable age that we all must face. Although his forehead is white his cheeks are red and rosy they’re beginning to droop with no signs of dimples. His jaw is average size but appears to be clenched permanently. The chin is rounded perfectly to fit his face and almost appears to be holding up the cheeks as they seem to slowly droop down his face. The edges of his mouth are never curved, but only straight as a line parallel to the ground, they never curve up to smile and they never curve down to frown.  His lips show small signs of wrinkles from the many years of eating and talking. His nose has a big structure looking to connect right into the overhanging eyebrows which overshadow his dark blue eyes. The nose is long coming down his face with quite a pointy tip and underneath it are two big nostrils like little caves. His ears are covered by the gray rough hair that almost looks like a cloud from a good distance.